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The professional summary should be a paragraph focusing in on your skills, not job experience. ( take out the data entry secretary part). Need keywords that JUMP out.
Move the college stuff to the bottom, remove the GPA parts, but leave the Dean's list part
Move the skills to the top right below professional summary
Your resume seems to push the data entry secretary stuff, but unless that's something you want, you may want to push the business/marketing background instead. Especially since you have your degree in it.
Need more specifics under each company. The bulletpoints look a bit too general
I've been a manager for the past 8 years and have interviewed tons of people, so this is what i look for. Keep in mind that a hiring manager looks at tons of resumes that all look the same and spend about 30 seconds looking at a resume before deciding and interview or not.
First thing I notice right off! Too many bullets ..the entire resume is a bullet.
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Since I am a recent college grad however, I feel it makes since to have education right below the summary. I originally had a paragraph form for the summary, but decided bullets make it easier on the eyes (besides I had a bunch of sentence fragments). As for bullets under the work history, don't you need about 5 for each position? You're right though, there are a lot of bullets.
As for the types of positions I want, I'm looking for administrative, office, secretarial type roles. I tried to fill my entire summary statements for common keywords (administrative, office, Microsoft Office, communication, organization, attention to detail), nouns that a hiring manager is likely to search for.
Once again, thank you for the help. Highly appreciated
Edit: GPA was included (> 3.0) and Major GPA (shows I improved).
Last edited by SnowyDragon; 03-12-2014 at 10:25 AM..
Reason: added reason for GPA
I would be happy to give feedback but I'm not going to click on a link and open an unknown Word document. I don't know if there are still Word viruses, but you never know. A PDF file would be better. There are free utilities out there to convert to PDF.
First of all, you're doing the link thing wrong. It's Test Resume Linky here. Quote me to see how I did it.
Regarding your resume, it looks good. Here are a few things to keep in mind while you improve it.
(1) You don't need to keep it in 1 page format anymore. It's outdated.
(2) I know it's only an outline, but try to be as specific as you can. And prepare to backup every point you make in the resume.
(3) Speaking of being specific, try to avoid fluff. I suspect you know what I'm talking about.
Since you are straight out of college, most employers will be more forgiving than for the rest of us. You're taking the initiative, which is a good thing. I wish you a bright future
First of all, you're doing the link thing wrong. It's Test Resume Linky here. Quote me to see how I did it.
Regarding your resume, it looks good. Here are a few things to keep in mind while you improve it.
(1) You don't need to keep it in 1 page format anymore. It's outdated.
(2) I know it's only an outline, but try to be as specific as you can. And prepare to backup every point you make in the resume.
(3) Speaking of being specific, try to avoid fluff. I suspect you know what I'm talking about.
Since you are straight out of college, most employers will be more forgiving than for the rest of us. You're taking the initiative, which is a good thing. I wish you a bright future
Thank you very much for your response. In regards to your point
1. If I was a hiring manager, having already read 100 resumes, would I be excited about having to read a 2 page resume? Additionally, I don't have much experience, so it would make sense to keep it to 1 page.
2. Specific? I will look into that. Thank you for your advice
3. You mean taking out unnecessary words and being concise?
I worked really hard on this resume, and have made well over a dozen revisions. It's amazing how difficult resumes can be, for a 1 page document.
Thank you very much for your response. In regards to your point
1. If I was a hiring manager, having already read 100 resumes, would I be excited about having to read a 2 page resume? Additionally, I don't have much experience, so it would make sense to keep it to 1 page.
2. Specific? I will look into that. Thank you for your advice
3. You mean taking out unnecessary words and being concise?
I worked really hard on this resume, and have made well over a dozen revisions. It's amazing how difficult resumes can be, for a 1 page document.
(1) Ok, disregard my advice then. I was thinking more of specialized jobs like what I'm doing. For what I do, it's impossible to keep it in 1 page. And every engineering firm that hire people like me have said they don't care how long or short the resume is. But in your case where you're looking for an entry level, it does make more sense to keep it in 1 page.
(3) Well, I'm talking about things like "well motivated" and other nonspecific wowsers that a lot of young people like to put in their resumes. They make the resume fuller but tells you little about the person. I know you don't have much of it in your resume, which is a big plus. I suppose you can keep the few that you have.
It really shows that you worked hard on the resume. You're on the right track.
Edit.
I should also add that there is no right way for a resume to look. Everyone has a style. You should look at our advices, but don't bet money on them.
I know a lot of people like to give criticisms, constructive or not, regardless of whether there needs to be criticisms or not. As an example, I once visited my old school and submitted my resume along with all the new students just for fun. The resumes were suppose to be "graded" by seniors. Keep in mind that my resume is a real world professional's resume. And it's been edited by my brother in law, who is a hiring manager for one of the largest engineering firms in the world. A few weeks later, I dropped by my old professor's office to visit him. Also found the resume I submitted for fun (by this time, I had forgotten I turned it in with the new students). Man, there were red marks all over. The suggestions written by whichever student that graded my resume gave really bad suggestions.
So, take it for what it's worth. The only person looking out for your best interest is you.
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