I'll give you my impression as a 30 yr old woman & someone who does some marketing (which is what an OLD profile is doing for you).
I don't find that hokey, but I find stating it at the beginning of your profile hokey.
The word "hokey" is also hokey.
- The smoking is turn-off, but good for you for trying to quit & being honest about it
- Leaving some stats out like "relationship type" & "religion" makes you wonder in a bad way
- "What I'm doing with my life" section is very vague. Try some specifics. I'm NOT talking about your job - what is your passion, your motivation, your interests? What gives you meaning? You mention some of this later on, but some may not keep scrolling.
- The "Favorites" section is the first place I get any real sense of who you are. The "Typical Friday Night" section is also way more interesting than the self-summary which is not gripping enough to compel you to scroll down. It's sort of goofy & odd, but not enough to be striking or exciting.
Generally, you sound like a cool guy, but not enough of a "definite energy". I disagree with others about your opinions on books & music, etc. Those are the few areas there is a clear personality. I think it's better to alienate some in order to attract someone who is truly compatible, but then I'm terrible at dating
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