Quick paper I wrote for my urban studies class.

[skyline122]

Thank you to everyone who responded to my post with great advice! I would just like to clear a few things up, this paper was not meant to be a formal essay of any kind, my professor was asking for more of a reflection on our readings with past experience. However, I do agree with a lot of the things yall have said. I struggle with keeping a consistent tone and I most definitely do not have a thesis (lmao). I am a Urban Studies/Journalism double major and right now I am trying to get my passion on to paper. I was more asking on feedback for the general ideas I displayed through the paper. One again, thank you though.

[TX Rover]

Originally Posted by skyline122

Thank you to everyone who responded to my post with great advice! I would just like to clear a few things up, this paper was not meant to be a formal essay of any kind, my professor was asking for more of a reflection on our readings with past experience. However, I do agree with a lot of the things yall have said. I struggle with keeping a consistent tone and I most definitely do not have a thesis (lmao). I am a Urban Studies/Journalism double major and right now I am trying to get my passion on to paper. I was more asking on feedback for the general ideas I displayed through the paper. One again, thank you though.

That’s the thing. There wasn’t a general idea. There was just a rant with no real target.

[75214Dad]

You have a view point certainly, but I wonder how much it’s clouding your research. I have never seen a data point that areas with increasing incomes have an increase in violence crime. In fact, what I most often read is that the arrival of wealthier residents leads to an increase in policing that the prior residents had been clamoring for (though usually not through the “right” avenues).

I would also suggest you look into how many independently owned business there are pre and post a certain point in time. Again, the research I have read shows that the new residents typically support more independent businesses and seek out the ones that are most “authentic”. Gentrified neighborhoods in DC, for example, have the same amount of black residents and more black owned business than 20 years ago- they just *also* have white people now.

I read an article a couple years ago (The Neighborhood Is Mostly Black. The Home Buyers Are Mostly White.) that has accompanying maps that suggest that there are very limited areas of Dallas that have experienced gentrification.

[TheOverdog]

I have never seen a data point that areas with increasing incomes have an increase in violence crime. In fact, what I most often read is that the arrival of wealthier residents leads to an increase in policing that the prior residents had been clamoring for (though usually not through the “right” avenues).

Well, if you check the area (specifically Trinity Groves) if you see what was there before (a single neighborhood that lost about 20% of its homes between 1960-2000 and a bunch of dumpy poorly designed light industrial buildings) it's very possible that crime increased, simply because before there was no-one around to be a victim or to report property crime before Trinity Groves was constructed.

that has accompanying maps that suggest that there are very limited areas of Dallas that have experienced gentrification.

Yes that is very true. Dallas has not gentrified very much.

[TX Rover]

Originally Posted by TheOverdog

Well, if you check the area (specifically Trinity Groves) if you see what was there before (a single neighborhood that lost about 20% of its homes between 1960-2000 and a bunch of dumpy poorly designed light industrial buildings) it's very possible that crime increased, simply because before there was no-one around to be a victim or to report property crime before Trinity Groves was constructed.



Yes that is very true. Dallas has not gentrified very much.

True. That’s one of those damn lies and statistics things that have no context.

While Dallas proper hasn’t gentrified that much, you can see that ship coming over the citizen right now. I wouldn’t be surprised to see a ton of development in previously “undesirable” neighborhoods with the requisite magnet schools and probates popping up right behind.

[cordata]

I'm not following what you mean by "probates."

[NoClueWho]

Originally Posted by cordata

Second, consider journalism. Either a class or writing for a student newspaper. The editor will brutally slash and mark up your work much faster than even a teacher would.

Amen to that!!!!!! In one semester of Journalism, I learned more about how to be a better writer (and about the English language in general) than I did in over a decade of taking English classes for years in school!

[TX Rover]

Originally Posted by Julio July

Amen to that!!!!!! In one semester of Journalism, I learned more about how to be a better writer (and about the English language in general) than I did in over a decade of taking English classes for years in school!

Did y’all read the thread? OP is a Journalism major.

[cordata]

Originally Posted by TX Rover

Did y’all read the thread? OP is a Journalism major.

I responded before he added that bit of info.

[TX Rover]

Originally Posted by cordata

I responded before he added that bit of info.

Yeah. It should be a rough go if that’s what being turned in. However, given that Reddit and Buzzfeed are cited as journalism at times, maybe we just need to accept the failure.