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Old 07-15-2012, 11:39 AM
 
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Hi I just want a critique on my Ok Cupid profile from the members who are women. Typically on Ok Cupid I meet one out of every 80 women I email and would like to improve this(although I know guys have it harder on dating sites). Any tips would be helpful.

http://www.okcupid.com/profile/camcoe31416]OkCupid[/url] | camcoe31416 / 35 / M / Austin, Texas

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Old 07-15-2012, 11:46 AM
 
Location: NYC
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I think you should cut your profile down to about half its current size. Everything you write tells something about yourself, but also gives a woman a reason to reject you. Three favorite movies is enough. I also suggest you change the "you should message me if..." section. Liking photography and Nat Geo has nothing to do with compatibility. Change it to qualities you appreciate in a woman. Final suggestion, get a better haircut.
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Old 07-15-2012, 11:59 AM
 
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I havent read the entire thing, obviously but if it takes this mucvh energy to put up a profile on a dating site, i think ill stick to the rl approaches. To be brutaly honest, seems like way too much information, and women appreciate a little a bit of mystery to the guy they want, not someone who offers it all up in their profile and likely talks more then they do. Im a guy, but I doubt many women get through reading the whole thing either, without falling asleep. Shorten it up dude, and leave only the most importasnt things in there. Liven it up some with humour.
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Old 07-15-2012, 12:19 PM
 
Location: Brentwood, Tennessee
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You sound like a cool guy. I think you do need to shorten your "favorites" section. Get a friend to help you with the "what I am good at" section, because I would really play attention to that part. Right now it looks like you hesitated there. Also the "What I am doing with my life" section. It makes you sound like a role-player, not someone I would be compelled to get to know. Include something there about a goal for your life.

As you know, you are fine the way you are. It's refreshing that you know you are an introvert and prefer small groups. Thankfully you aren't trying to be someone you aren't.

I also urge you to go to a pro and get a new hairstyle. It looks like you have a good head of hair, but that style is really not doing you any favors. Your pix are very good. My favorite is the one with the black jacket.

Of course, looks aren't everything, but when people are window shopping, presentation counts a lot.

Good luck!
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Old 07-15-2012, 02:58 PM
 
Location: Mohave Valley, AZ
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You may want to correct a couple of misspellings.
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Old 07-16-2012, 03:16 PM
 
Location: Houston, TX
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Final suggestion, get a better haircut.
I agree, that is a really odd haircut.
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Old 07-16-2012, 03:39 PM
 
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Aside from the big rubber band ball, there's no hint of humor or strong feeling in your profile. Everything is "I like..."

Your favorite movies, foods and places to visit are only going to tell a woman so much. What kind of woman are you looking for? What do you feel strongly about? What are your core ethical beliefs?
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Old 07-16-2012, 03:43 PM
 
Location: Chicago
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Please refer to this post. //www.city-data.com/forum/relat...heir-hair.html

Not being mean, but seriously if I were going bald. This is what I would do. Good luck.

Also, right off the bat you have a grammatical error. "I have live in Austin for about 11 years."
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Old 07-16-2012, 04:01 PM
 
Location: Davenport, Iowa
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Please refer to this post. //www.city-data.com/forum/relat...heir-hair.html

Not being mean, but seriously if I were going bald. This is what I would do. Good luck.

Also, right off the bat you have a grammatical error. "I have live in Austin for about 11 years."
I'm assuming it's just a typo, but proofreading is important for most writing.

I can't read the profile because I'm not an OKC member, but good, clear, nice pictures help. I'm not a big fan of mirror shots and self cell phone photos. If you're an active guy, try to use some photos of you doing active things.

As for the writing part, just try to have fun with it. I tried to use some humor and I got some good reactions.
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