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Old 11-29-2012, 06:45 PM
 
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I'm applying for jobs in print shops and I don't want to restrict myself to one position if they have something else available that fits my qualifications. Here's how the first 2 sentences in my cover letter goes:

Please see enclosed a copy of my resume for which I am applying for a position as a printer. As a determined young individual I am very eager to apply for this position and obtain an interview.

I want to replace 'printer' with 'job that fits my qualifications'. But when you read the sentences with those words, it sounds weird and unnatural. I think I'll need to change the entirety of both sentences to fit applying for any job that I'm qualified for in the shop.

Any suggestions?
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Old 11-29-2012, 07:19 PM
 
Location: California
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Please find attached a copy of my resume. I am applying for the (insert job title) position but am open to exploring all opportunities at (insert company name) for which my qualifications are a match.


Or something like this. It needs to sound like you wrote it or the flow of the document will be off.
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Old 11-30-2012, 01:44 AM
 
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Great rewrite from previous poster. The original statement is too much "resume-speak." Does OP say "obtain a position" when talking? "A copy of my resume for which..." doesn't make grammatical sense. I really like the rewrite. Much clearer. Personally, if I see resume-speak, my brain glazes over.
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Old 12-01-2012, 01:51 PM
 
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Thanks.
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Old 12-03-2012, 10:58 PM
 
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Any suggestions?
It's best to write a cover letter specifically for the job and company for which you are applying, since a cover letter is a summary of the reasons why you are the best person for a job.

First, you should find out which companies are hiring, and for what specific positions. That alone makes creating a cover letter much easier. This can be done over the phone, in person, or by sending potential employers a "letter of interest". Once you have that information, Google "cover letter examples". Then, choose a format and fill in your own information.

Good luck.
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