Ending my email to a job ad with this, how does it sound? (cover letters, applying)

[firsttimeunemployed]

And is there a grammar error?

After 2-3 other prior sentences....
"I have prior work experience in X and Y which make me an ideal candidate for this role. Please see attached for my resume which includes additional information. I have a very strong interest in XYZ and ABC, and I look forward to hearing from you."

[katie45]

Originally Posted by firsttimeunemployed

And is there a grammar error?

After 2-3 other prior sentences....
"I have prior work experience in X and Y which make me an ideal candidate for this role. Please see attached for my resume which includes additional information. I have a very strong interest in XYZ and ABC, and I look forward to hearing from you."

My suggestion:

"As reflected on my resume, prior work experience in the areas of X and Y will benefit your organization and I look forward to meeting with you to discuss more in detail."

Keep it simple and short, HR folks are inundated with a ton of resumes and cover letters. You want to catch their attention with as few words as possible.

Best of luck!

[STT Resident]

Simply grammatically:

Originally Posted by firsttimeunemployed

And is there a grammar error?

After 2-3 other prior sentences....
"I have prior work experience in X and Y which makes me an ideal candidate for this role. (Please see attached for) My attached resume (which) includes additional information. I have a very strong interest in XYZ and ABC, and (I) look forward to hearing from you."

[AV8n]

Originally Posted by firsttimeunemployed

And is there a grammar error?

After 2-3 other prior sentences....
"I have prior work experience in X and Y which make me an ideal candidate for this role. Please see attached for my resume which includes additional information. I have a very strong interest in XYZ and ABC, and I look forward to hearing from you."

How will your prior experience make you an ideal candidate? (Example: My prior experience as a Male Bovine Excrement Disposal Technician makes me well-suited for handling customers' bull****.)

"Very strong" is overkill. Consider saying that you have a "strong interest" or are "very interested" instead. Or leave it out altogether. The fact that you are applying indicates that you (hopefully) have an interest in their company.